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Most countries offer two education systems from which parents can select the form of schooling which most suits their child. Compare and contrast state-run and privately owned school in your own country or in a foreign country.

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Education is a weapon by which we can win the world. Education plays an important role in everyone's development.
Therefore
, parents want that a good education is provided to their children and help them in their future. Parents choose between
state
 run and private schools which is best for their own characteristics.
To begin
 with, most of the parents choose the
state
 run school because they think that our children can get better facilities there like scholarship, free books and
etcetera
. Many students get scholarship due to their great performance and now they are studying in abroad.
Moreover
,
state
 run schools accept all types of students. In these schools, children can get admission without any entrance test. Many
state
 competitions are organised by these schools so students can get a chance to play at the
state
 level.
On the other hand
, other parents think that private schools are best because they provide so many facilities like English medium, activities like, music, arts and
etcetera
. In private school rules and discipline is more strict than government schools.
Moreover
, in private school students get the admission by test. They are selected on the base of their test. By
this
 students know about their ability and gain self confidence.
Furthermore
, private schools provide computer and science labs to help students in their study. In the conclusion, both schools have their own importance.
However
,
state
 run schools are more economic than private schools. So everyone can not afford private schools. For them
state
 run schools are best.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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