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Question: Computer are being used more and more in education. Some people say this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give tour opinion.

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there
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There
 is no doubt that these days all people are using
computer
 in education. The question is what is the advantages and disadvantages in
useing
an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)
using
computer
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computers
the computer
 for learning?
in
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In
this
 essay
im
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I'm
 going to discuss my view and draw my personal conclusion.
in
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In
 terms of positive side
Pc
the state prevailing during the absence of war
peace
PC
 help us get the information faster. The main reason to supper
this
 claim is that
computer
now thanks
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now, thanks
 to the internet have access in a lot of
intel
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Intel
initial
. To illustrate, help student
do
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does
 research in
short period
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a short period
. In other word,
computer
 have many
benifet
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benefits
benefit
 in teaching so,
alomst
(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but
almost
 all people use it.
However
, they have
also
causes
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caused
.
Firsly
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Firstly
,
its
the thing named or in question
it
lead
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leads
 to lack of skill in writing
.
Accept space
.
 In 2005 report shows that 66 percent of persons who use
computer
 in writing are not good in writing.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
pc
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PC
 lead to health problems
such
 as, loneliness.
This
 is because, people spend too much looking at the screen.
Also
, wastes a
lots
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lot
 of funding of the
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 because is needed in every
schools
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school
,
Accept space
,
unviersities
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
 and collage.
in
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In
 conclusion,
although
 that
computer
are
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is
 important in education it
also
 have
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that
computer
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the computer
a computer
 is good in education
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