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Traditional medicine is more benefits than modern medicine

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Nowadays, many employees are suffering from occupational diseases because they
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 overtime and
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, have less time for exercising. Personally, I would like a balanced lifestyle to keep healthy. Due to the increasing cost of living, many individuals have to
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 longer or do jobs in several different industries to make a living, which will occupy most of their time and make them feel exhausted. As a consequence, they may only want to relax and do nothing after
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. In the long run, these workers may have some health problems, either mental or physical,
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 as stomach pain, cramps, and cervical spondylosis, even worse, they may have depression. The growing expenditure has indeed caused more pressures and issues in our lives. Given these health-related issues, we have to pay more attention to our perks.
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 it may be difficult for someone who is exhausted after
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 to go for exercise, we can start with some gentle movement like to stand up for one minute after sitting in front of the computer for forty-five minutes.
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 activity can increase the circulation of your blood, making you refreshed.
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, we can release our pressure by singing a song or slowing down the task. At home, we can move our legs up and down when lying on the bed or to intimate the movement of riding a bike. These moderate physical movements will ultimately improve our health. In conclusion, busier as we are getting, we can still try to find some methods for exercise and a balanced life. Only by doing so, can we maintain our well-being and happiness.
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