PEOPLE ARE LIVING LONGER NOWADAYS. THERE SHOULD BE AN INCREASE IN RETIRE AGE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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TECHNOLOGY HAS ROSE HUMAN LIFE-EXPECTANCY TO SOME EXTENT.

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, PEOPLE LIVE MUCH LONGER THAN USUAL AND

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EHY CERTAIN FOLKS ARGUE TO RISE THE RETIREMENT AGE FROM WORK.

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ESSAY WILL COMPLETELY CONCUR WITH THE STATEMENT DUE TO NUMEROUS ADVATAGES FO DOING SO.

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ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW THE INDIVIDUAL WOULD BE BENEFITED AND

SECONDLY

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, HOW

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WOULD CONTRIBUTE TO PEAK THE NATION'S

ECONOMY

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. FROM AN INDIVIDUAL POINT OF VIEW, INCREASED PENSION RECEIVING AGE MAKE OLDER FOLKS INDEPENDENT.

AS A RESULT

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, THEY DO NOT HAVE TO RELY ON THEIR OFFSPRING OR RELATIVES.

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WOULD DELINE THE OLD-AGE HOME REQUIREMENT AROUN THE NATION.

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, ACCORDING TO THE CANADIAN GOVERNMENT, 80% OF THEIR CIVILIAN OVER THE AGE OF 60 LIVING HAPPYLY EVER AS THEY HAVE ENOUGH FINANCIAL SUPPORT FOR THEMSELVES DUE TO RAISED RETIREMENT AGE. FROM THE GOVERNMENT POINT OF VIEW, THE CHANGE IN RETIREMENT AGE WOULD MAKE COUNTRY'S

ECONOMY

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MUCH STRONGER THAN EVER, AS THERE WOULD BE MORE WORKFORCE IN EACH FIELD.

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WOULD RISE THE NUMBER OF TAX PAYER MEMBERS,

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ECONOMY

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WOULD BE INCREASED.

FOR EXAMPLE

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, THE USA

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CONSIDERED AS WEALTHY AND STRONGEST IN COMPARE TO OTHER DEVELOPED TERRITORIES, BECAUSE OF THE MORE RETIRE AGE.

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, AT SOME POINT, THERE WOULD BE NO SPOT FOR THE FRESHERS TO TO AND OBTAIN A SUFFICIENT TRAING IN THE FIELD AS THERE WILL BE MORE SENIORS AVAILABLE TO FILL THE SPOT. IN CONCLUSION, INCREASED RETIREMENT AGE INDEED OFFER SEVERAL PROS THAN CONS FOR THE PERSON AND AUTHORITY AS WELL. BUT, TO IMPIMENT

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CHANGE, THE REGIME SHOULD HAVE SUPPORT FROM PUBLIC AND TO GET THAT, THEY HAVE TO PROOVE THE BENEFITS TO THE CIVILIN.

NEVERTHELESS

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, ONCE THEY GET THE SUPPORT, THERE WOULD BE NO STOP ON THE

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PEOPLE ARE LIVING LONGER NOWADAYS. THERE SHOULD BE AN INCREASE IN RETIRE AGE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Your opinion

A city should try to preserve its old, historic buildings rather than replacing them with modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that people should be allowed to work only till a set retirement age. Others say that if people want to work, age should not be a barrier to them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

89.The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?