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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The trend of web shopping is increasing day by day. Some people say that
this
 situation of online shopping one day will cause the decline of shops in the markets.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree with
this
 statement and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss the problem in the below essay.
In addition
,
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,
some people like shopping
from
Suggestion
for
 a site through internet because it is very cheap and comfortable way to get your desirable things
at
Suggestion
on
 your door step.But shop from these sites is not perfect always
,
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,
sometimes folk receives their stuff with a damage or not according to their choice.They face the difficulty of
diffrence
the quality of being unlike or dissimilar
difference
differences
 between the picture of the item and the real item.
On the other hand
 visit to the mall and buy
ur
of you or yourself
your
our
 goods is a better option to overcome these problems.We can select the perfect thing for us in the shop without any fault.
Moreover
, A huge group of people still love go to the markets
,
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,
because it
also
 a way of entertainment. A visit to the bazaar with your family and friends is a fun and it provides an opportunity to bring the friends together. When we feel bored at home, we can go with our friends or sibling to the market for outing to feel happy and cheerful
,
Accept space
,
where we can enjoy the food and window shopping too.
Besides
 these
,
Accept space
,
the shops in the streets and towns give a chance of business to the human being by which they can earn to fulfil their needs. It is a better method of gaining money for years.
For
example if
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example, if
 someone is
illitrate
not able to read or write
illiterate
 and can not get a job they can spend some money and open a shop to start their business. In the conclusion, the sales browsers never can replace the live shops in the living areas.They have their own charms and demand in public and they will be always in the competition of marketing.

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