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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher taxes on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, obesity is becoming more and more diffuse. In developed countries, scientists believe that the growth of people affected by health problems is due to the abuse of fast
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 type of
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. The most important problem, regarding the health issue, is the disinformation. According to recent studies, only 12% of
population
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the population
 of US is aware of what is inside a hamburger of MC Donald.
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 is the clear sign that consumers ignore the huge quantity of chemical substance which are used in order to maintain hamburger fresh for
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a long time
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agree
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 that it is necessary that the governments provide to the community tools in order to understand the risk of eating fast
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 but it is not enough. Unfortunately, the effect of campaign of information is not immediate,
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, higher tax
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on
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 type of
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 will change instantly the image of it. After the introduction of higher taxes, fast
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 companies will be forced to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
prices which
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prices, which
 will become less competitive than before.
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, there
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 a lot of politics that believe that higher tax will not be able to increase prices and
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, the people will continue to prefer
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 type of products because still affordable.
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, I think that even if the fast
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 will be a little bit more
expansive
high in price or charging high prices
expensive
 than now, the people will think more before going there to eat. In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments have a crucial role and the
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 step in order to decrease quickly health problems is the rise of taxes.
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