Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
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thirty years, technology has been developed dramatically. Since the discover of the telephone, people are always connected. For
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reason, technology has been used in order to control people.
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essay will explain why the disadvantages of the development are more important of the advantages.
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of all, the disadvantage is the limitation of our privacy. Some companies are able to spy our
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and collect them. The main problem is that people do not realise
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situation. Recent research affirms that 60% of the European population do not believe that some companies,
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as google, have access
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about us without our authorization. In my experience, once I was speaking about some specific type of food and, after one hour, there were advertisements in Google about it.
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, in some countries the technology can restrict more and more the freedom of the population.
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, in Singapore, even if the police think that your behaviour is suspicious, they can bring you in jail.
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, there are a lot of benefits. Security cameras can allow the government to create a safer environment.
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, when a crime is committed, it is easy to find the guilty man because of the recorded evidence. But according to some economist, there is one another important advantage: it is easiest understood, which type of business the market need. In
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economy point of view, government can exploit
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in order to increase the national’s wellness. In conclusion, I believe that in
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moment the disadvantages are more important of the disadvantage because the
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from companies and governments, limit the freedom of the population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Surveillance
  • 2. Monitoring
  • 3. Cell phone tracking
  • 4. Security cameras
  • 5. Public safety
  • 6. Law enforcement
  • 7. Privacy concerns
  • 8. Personal freedom
  • 9. Autonomous
  • 10. Breach of trust
  • 11. Misuse of information
  • 12. Institutional integrity
  • 13. Psychological impact
  • 14. Mental well-being
  • 15. Societal trust
  • 16. Paranoia
  • 17. Transparency
  • 18. Stringent regulations
  • 19. Criminal deterrence
  • 20. Apprehension of criminals
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