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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
last
 thirty years, technology has been developed dramatically. Since the discover of the telephone, people are always connected. For
this
 reason, technology has been used in order to control people.
This
 essay will explain why the disadvantages of the development are more important of the advantages.
First
 of all, the disadvantage is the limitation of our privacy. Some companies are able to spy our
information
 and collect them. The main problem is that people do not realise
this
 situation. Recent research affirms that 60% of the European population do not believe that some companies,
such
 as google, have access
of
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to
 a lot of
information
 about us without our authorization. In my experience, once I was speaking about some specific type of food and, after one hour, there were advertisements in Google about it.
Furthermore
, in some countries the technology can restrict more and more the freedom of the population.
For instance
, in Singapore, even if the police think that your behaviour is suspicious, they can bring you in jail.
On the contrary
, there are a lot of benefits. Security cameras can allow the government to create a safer environment.
For example
, when a crime is committed, it is easy to find the guilty man because of the recorded evidence. But according to some economist, there is one another important advantage: it is easiest understood, which type of business the market need. In
this
 economy point of view, government can exploit
this
information
 in order to increase the national’s wellness. In conclusion, I believe that in
this
 moment the disadvantages are more important of the disadvantage because the
information
, which are
collect
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collected
 from companies and governments, limit the freedom of the population.
Submitted by alessandra.orano on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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