"The chart below gives information about “Istanbul Promo plus” sales in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant"

"The chart below gives information about “Istanbul Promo plus” sales in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant"
The chart shows how Promo Plus in Istanbul fluctuated over a period of 12 months. It is observed that in the first month of 2007, Promo Plus
sales
stood at 200
million
turkish
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lira
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and rose slightly to reach about 225
million
in February.
This
was followed by another increase,
although
much steeper, in March when
sales
where
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were
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almost 125
million
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lira
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higher than
February
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in February
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.
However
,
this
upward trend was suddenly broken and
sales
plummeted dramatically over the
next
4 months to reach a little over 100
million
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lira
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in July. August
sales
showed a significant rise back to January levels as figures nearly doubled, but
this
was not to
last
as they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. October came with a small increase of about 100
million
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lira
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in
sales
, after which
sales
figures levelled off and remained relatively static over the
last
two months of 2007.
Overall
, Promo Plus in Istanbul remained relatively unchanged in 2007 as January and December
sales
were fairly equal.
Also
,
sales
were at their highest in March
while
the weakest
sales
figures could be observed in July and September.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, turkish, lira with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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