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Some say that sports play an important role in society. Others think it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Do you agree or not?

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Introduction
Nowadays, Sports have gained popularity in today's world. Someone says that sports play a vital role in society. Another believes that it is just considered as recreation pastimes. I totally disagree with
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 statement, as sports not only help people upgrade
health
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 level, but
also
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 make a profit for the
country
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's economy.
Body paragraph 1
It is deniable that sports help increase people physical as well as mental
health
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.
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, since the more exercises that we do, the more well-shaped body and good
health
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 we will gain. Jogging,
for example
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, if we play it regularly, it is able to help us strengthen bones, lose weight, and enhance metabolism of the body in the proper way.
Moreover
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, it
also
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 helps reduce the risk of so many diseases, like stroke, diabetes as our immune systems are strengthened by doing exercises.
Body paragraph 2
Besides
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 the beneficial that sports effect on people's
health
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, it
also
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 make so much profit in the
country
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.
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, Sport events help develop the
country
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's tourism. World Cup,
for instance
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, it attracts million spectators all over the world to gather up at the
hostal
a hotel providing overnight lodging for travelers
hostel
hospital
country
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. So, the government is able to take advantage to advert the cultures, landscapes of the
country
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.
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, sport activities provide one of the most cost-effective forms of preventative medicine.
This
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 means that participation in sport contributes to people's ability to lead a long and healthy life, so the nation's cost for
healthcare
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health care
 will be cut effectively.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
Sport
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the Sport
 is not just simply an activity to help increase people's
health
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 and live, it
also
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 plays a crucial role in the development of the
country
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social fabric
  • fostering
  • community spirit
  • health and wellness
  • national pride
  • leisure activity
  • entertainment
  • unwind
  • economic impact
  • generating jobs
  • boosting tourism
  • stimulating local economies
  • negative aspects
  • risk of injuries
  • pressure on young athletes
  • doping
  • corruption
  • essential societal component
  • responsible management
  • promoting
  • significant
  • merely
  • contributing
  • progress
  • acknowledging
  • value
  • emphasizing
  • balance
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