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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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Nowadays a lot of professional workers emigrate to more successfully places in the world.
Although
 the issue is grown up year in by year, the government of the undeveloped countries
try
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tries
solve
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to solve
 to stop it. It
is try
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is trying
tries
, graduated people and skilled
laborers
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
 leave the homeland to get a chance
to
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of
 better life. Generally, low salary and high cost children's education are forced families to move to other developed nations. If you do not pay off food and apartment you can not survive.
Additionally
, the doctors save our lives and the
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
 save our society, for
this
reasons
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reason
 they mast
have
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has
 the
best of high technologically
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best high technology
best of high technology
 equipment. The chairmen of poor country can change
this
 situation on
opposite
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the opposite
.
Firstly
, the country's economic have to have freedom, because any penny waste on a sensitizes today is doubled income tomorrow.
From
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For
 every dollar of
made
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making
profit
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a profit
 will pay a
taxes
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tax
, that give money on the generation's education and the
medicine
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medical
 care. The
leaved
being or located on or directed toward the side of the body to the west when facing north
left
 emigrants won't be returned, but the huge quantity of prepared to leave can stay at home.
More difficulty problem
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The more difficulty problem
 is a salary of
successfully
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successful
 employee can be
change
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changed
 to positive too. The national produce is generated by middle level firms.
For
instance one
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instance, one
 of more decision is a gap year in
pay
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payment
 of taxes for
company
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companies
a company
 with
short list
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a short list
 of members. In
this
 case the owners can attract high quality specialists by high salary, that improve the environment in
country
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the country
a country
countries
. In conclusion,
this
 topic is a particular for
modern world
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the modern world
 and the government
mast
a necessary or essential thing
must
 do all of possible to find solve. Not one the capital is developed
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
, but else more right human resource management.

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