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Marketing is an essential part of any business; nowadays, everything is becoming digital, so the demand for digital services is increasing and many companies are offering new services to attract prospective clients and retain their client base. Because of
this
, I have become fascinated by the digital aspect of marketing and how
to make
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making
intelligent utilization
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the intelligent utilization
of the data
that is
available, and it is in
this
area that I would like to pursue a career. On a daily basis, I read articles and news about how marketing and the new innovations and pioneering
that is
happening in the tech field, including social media, to
further
my passion in the field. I am working for Amazon, which is an American multinational technology company that focuses on e-commerce, and I work as a customer service agent for the Italian customer base (Actually, I am fluent in five languages including English, French, Punjabi, Hindi and Italian). Despite my current position, which in fact has excellent promotional prospects, my dream is to pursue higher education as I believe that it will provide me with all the experience and knowledge I need in order to achieve a higher goal, either in Amazon or other marketing fields. As part of my current role, I am a team leader in an Amazon project called ‘Gemba’.
This
is a problem-solving role that involves
trouble shooting
solve problems
troubleshooting
the issues that crop up in different departments of Amazon. I take these problems back to the team and we work on finding the best solution. Any solutions that are agreed upon are relayed to other
gemba
a narrow republic surrounded by Senegal in West Africa
Gambia
teams and filtered to throughout the system.
In addition
to
this
, our team
also
works on new innovations to improve the current situations.
This
role has given me a lot of new skills as well as improving my confidence and communication skills. In my free time, I lead a very healthy lifestyle with a good balance of exercise and other activities. I frequent the gym daily and when I get the chance to relax, escape into a good book, especially science fiction and fantasy. I strongly feel that my lifestyle is one of happiness and the avoidance of triggers that may have a detrimental impact. My long-term aim is to become a marketing manager, and I believe that
this
university course will help me to achieve
this
. I genuinely hope that
this
personal statement proves that I am not only seriously career-minded, but I will
also
be a valuable addition to your department.

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