In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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, one of the most obvious changes, is the shift of our mindsets towards the thought of curfew. As curfew involves limiting teenagers from being out of doors after a particular time,

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pattern of social interaction is no longer dominant or valid in most modern cultures.

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change of mindset is how efficient technology can connect us at any time, which limits

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having a good knowledge about the places that teenagers like to visit, so that we can

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more efficient advices from our side. As a matter of fact, twenty years ago, my parents have imposed a curfew on me, as I was allowed to stay out of doors till 9:30 pm.

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happened once and has gradually changed as they gradually injected courage in me to stay out of doors. I believe

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has greatly influenced my character and inner security.

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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the worker, but not the employers.

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