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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
The revolutionary advancement in modern technology has endowed people with substantial resources for their survival in the best possible way. The availability of
variety
Suggestion
a variety
 of facilities has enabled the people to choose inalienable beneficial opportunities to adopt in their lives.
However
, there are sections of society that cannot afford even basic necessities. For them these choices are out of reach,
hence
 I partially agree with the view. In the present era, human beings have exponentially increased the number of options to avail in different fields like food, transport and business due to many reasons.
Firstly
, the creative methods to produce
variety
Suggestion
a variety
 of food and its preservation have benefitted human population with provision of significant types of edibles during the entire year.
For instance
, non-seasonals can be bought from the food market irrespective of the weather conditions due to modernized preservation methods.
Secondly
, while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, we can opt for many choices, according to affordability and convenience, due to
inventions
Suggestion
the inventions
 of
faster
Suggestion
the fastest
 ways of transportation leading to revolution in transport hubs.
Furthermore
, the advancement in education and development has endowed people with availability of
enormous number
Suggestion
the enormous number
 of professional fields to succeed in their lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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