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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensivetuition fee.Not all students can afford them so some people think that university edudation should be free for everyone.What extend do you agree or disagree.

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Most of the universities required high tuition fee in order to study.
T
herefore some
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Therefore, some
students cannot afford these expensive fees
,
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,
thus
 number of people think that academic
education
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ave
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has
to free for everyone.In my opinion,! c
ompetely
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Completely
Competely
agree
this
 s
ituation it
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situation, it
is best key to assist
university
education
 for everybody.
Firstly
, a good reason to abolish
university
 fees is,
i
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,
t gives equal opportunity for all students regardless rich and poor background.At the present number of students who have g
reat inspiration
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a great inspiration
to learn,
h
owever unable
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however, unable
to enter
university
 because of their background.U
nfortunaly nowadays
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Unfortunately, nowadays
Unfortunately nowadays
society more and more people discriminating themselves for
education
 level, if all people have equal option to get academic
education
this
 issue will no longer appear.
Secondly
, having no fees for
university
education
 means students will no longer have to work a^,
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costs.
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, in U
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the UK
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either way
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Time
w
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due to pay their tuition fees.
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Furthermore, students
can only focus on their
university
 f
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hope
this
 will produce f
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far better results
far better result
a far better result
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