You are a member of a international students club. The club is organizing an event to celebrate poplar foods around the world. Write a letter to the event organizer, Lucis Offer to make a poplar dish from your country Describe what this dish is Explain why it should be included in event

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Dear Lucis,

First,

I would like to take

this

opportunity to thank you for your great initiative to organize a meeting to taste various foods from different countries. The introduction of different foods from various countries around the world could encourage pupils to learn from different cultures.

Second,

also

would like to suggest cooking a very delicious food of my country, called Fesenjoon.

This

food is a stew which is served with rice in my home country, Iran. The ingredients are walnuts, meat and pomegranate sauce.

Moreover

, you may find the detailed instructions in the attached file. If you need more information in

this

regard ,I will be more than happy to assist you. I really believe that everyone will welcome

this

meal

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since

walnut

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the walnut

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tree is a very common plant in

this

area,

consequently

eating a stew with walnuts will be attractive. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards

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task achievement

Your letter is thoughtful and well-structured. To improve further, you might want to elaborate a bit more on the cultural significance of the dish to offer a richer context.

coherence cohesion

You've organized your letter well, but you could improve slightly by ensuring each paragraph strictly focuses on one main idea or point.

task achievement

Your tone is perfectly suited for this type of correspondence—friendly, polite, and helpful.

coherence cohesion

The introductory and closing remarks are effectively articulated, providing a pleasant and courteous touch.

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6 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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