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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this element.

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Some people believe public fundings should be spent on railways, others think
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 should be spent on roads. In
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 essay I will explain the reasons why I agree with
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 statement. Investing in railways is essential as trains are a more convenient means of transport. Take,
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 train only is needed to carry thousands of passengers to work, meanwhile, private cars are used by
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 or two people at a time, increasing the traffic noticeably. Another advantage of trains is the short time it takes to arrive downtown.
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, in Buenos Aires it would take maybe
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 hour driving in heavy traffic to get to work neighbouring areas
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 as Vicente Lopez, whereas by train you would only need 15 to 20 minutes.
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, those who think money should be spent on roads argue that cars can reach places that trains do not. The province of Misiones, in Argentina, is
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, there, trains have not arrived ever. In spite of
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, trains are more environmentally friendly than cars owing to the small amount fumes they emit. To illustrate, the contamination emitted by
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 car in a 30 kilometre trip equals to 400 kilometres of train ride. In conclusion, whereas roads should be built and looked after by the government to reach far away cities, in my opinion, more money should be spent on building railways and trains as these are fast, convenient and environmentally friendly.
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, politicians should always bear in mind ecological and practical aspects to decide where to spend money.
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