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The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008

The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008
#show #household #patterns #two #countries
The pie chart compares the family
expenditure
 patterns in the two
countries
 from 1980 to 2008. In 1980, the percentage of
expenditure
 on food and drink in the
UK
 was lower
from
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than
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 the new
Zealand
with
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at
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 23% and 29% respectively.
By contrast
, the figure for utility
bills
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bill
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 outcomes was only 26% in the
UK
, but in New
Zealand
, it had increased by 1% during a year.
However
, expenses on leisure
had
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accounted for 18% in New
Zealand
,
while
the
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spending in the
UK
was
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gradually increased by 9%. In
both
countries
, the transport
expenditure
 was generated
to
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at
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 17% and 15%
accordingly
 and opposed trend was followed by others in
both
countries
 were the same with 9%.
Furthermore
, In 2008 the spending on food and drinks had fallen slightly to 25% in New
Zealand
 and had dropped dramatically to 13% in the
UK
.
Further
, a slight rose in
expenditure
 on utility bills in
both
countries
 with 28% in the
UK
 and 31% in New
Zealand
.
While
 the figure for transport
families
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families'
family's
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 spending stood at 14% in the
UK
, whilst the outcomes of New
Zealand
closely
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were closely
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 followed by 2% respectively. After that, leisure household expenses had an inclined with 34% in the
UK
 as the result of it
was
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dramatically declined in New
Zealand
 by 17%.
Moreover
, 11% of other family
expenditurewas
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expenditure was
expenditures
 the same in
both
countries
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the percentage of
expenditure
 on food and drinks drooped significantly in
both
countries
 over the period shown,
whereas
expenditure
 on utility bills
was
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increased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, countries, uk, zealand, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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