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In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology IT, for example, the world wide web and communication by E-mail. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future . To what extent do you agree with this view?

In the modern world, it is undeniable that
information
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technology
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 has developed rapidly over the past two decades, with innovations
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 as the World Wide Web and email transforming the way people communicate and work. Some people argue that these developments are likely to bring more negative effects than positive ones in the future.
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, I largely disagree with
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 view, as the benefits of
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technology
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 continue to outweigh its drawbacks. One of the most obvious reasons is that
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technology
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 greatly improves efficiency and access to
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. To illustrate, the internet allows people to obtain knowledge instantly, communicate across borders, and collaborate in real time.
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, email and online platforms enable businesses to operate globally and students to access educational resources regardless of location. In the future,
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 technological advancements are likely to enhance productivity, innovation, and economic growth, making IT an essential tool for modern societies. Another point that should not be overlooked is that
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technology
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 has some negative effects, these can be managed effectively. To clarify, issues
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 as cybercrime, data privacy, and excessive screen time are genuine concerns.
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, misuse of personal data or overreliance on digital communication may lead to security risks or reduced social interaction.
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, governments and organisations can address these problems through stronger regulations, improved cybersecurity, and public education on responsible
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 use. As awareness increases, societies can minimise these risks
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 continuing to benefit from technological progress. To recapitulate, it is evident that
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technology
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 has transformed modern life in largely positive ways, despite certain challenges.
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, I believe that IT developments are more likely to have positive effects than negative ones in the future. With proper management and regulation,
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technology
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 will continue to support communication, education, and global development rather than harm society.

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strength
Your view is clear and you state it well. Keep this main line in the essay.
improvement
Add a small look at the other side, then show why you think the good points beat the bad.
writing
Try to use shorter sentences in places so the reader get the idea fast.
structure
Each paragraph should have a strong main idea at its start and link back to the big aim of your essay.
structure
Plan is strong with three clear parts.
content
You show a real life use of IT like web and email.
language
You use good linking words to move ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information
  • web
  • email
  • internet
  • online
  • access
  • learning
  • education
  • remote
  • work
  • job
  • business
  • speed
  • cost
  • communication
  • health
  • telemedicine
  • online courses
  • e-banking
  • privacy
  • security
  • data
  • crime
  • scams
  • fake news
  • screen time
  • mental health
  • face to face
  • contact
  • automation
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • outage
  • power cut
  • laws
  • policy
  • digital literacy
  • skills
  • ethics
  • AI
  • effect
  • balance
  • policy
  • public
  • growth
  • development
  • impact
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