A country's future depend on its young people. Therefore it is often argued that government should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree??

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It is undeniable that the
future
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of any
country
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rely
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relies
on the young generation of the
nation
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. They play a crucial role in it,
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however there
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however, there
is an argument that
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government
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the government
should allocate much money on
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next generation
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the next generation
. I partially agree with the above mentioned statement in
essay
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the essay
an essay
. On one hand, if
government
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invest
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invests
a significant amount in
education sector
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the education sector
that will help to improve education quality and broaden youngsters horizon.
For example
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, Canada is the
third
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best education provider
country
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and it helps people
to get
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get
employment. If someone has knowledge and skills about their
field they
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field, they
will be able to earn income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic requirements without any obstacles.
Moreover
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, A
nation
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should invest in order to create new employment or business opportunities which helps
there
of them or themselves
their
people to get earnings and make their living standard better. Turning to the other side of the argument not only
next
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generation plays an important
part but
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part, but
also
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every single person of the
nation
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play
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plays
an important role in a
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country
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country's
development.
Firstly
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,
government
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should invest in the resources because if they do not have
resources
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the resources
to
survive
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survive, then
then
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there is no use of investing in the youth of
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country
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the country
a country
.
Secondly
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, the
nation
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should focus on economic and financial growth of a
country
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because it helps to establish a base for better
present
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presentation
. There is a proverb, better present can lead a better
future
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.
However
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, young people
is
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are
the
future
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of the
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country but
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country, but
we
can not
can not
cannot
completely count on them because
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future
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the future
is unpredictable and there are several other sectors in which
government
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have to invest
such
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as defence, so on.
Personally I
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Personally, I
think,
government
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should invest wisely and appropriate in order to make a better
future
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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