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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development

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Shopping becomes a habit for people and more and more people moving to big shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 rather than small local shops and
thats
Suggestion
that's
 the reason these small shops are getting closed. In my opinion,
this
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 is a negative development,
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of the decreasing
competition
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 and people associated with small shops are loosing their jobs. To start with,
Firstly
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, There are
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
 of people who were
connecting
Suggestion
connected
 with small shops are losing their jobs. People are connected with these in many ways like owners, distributors and workers. These small shops are the earning source for them and their family. Due to these small shops are getting close, people associated with them are loosing their jobs.
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, according to an article from The Harward university, there will be a 70% increase in unemployment in
next
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 20 years, even if 50% of small shops closes.
Secondly
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, Big malls are giving huge discounts on products, so people can attract and come to malls rather than going on small shops. Having
competition
Use synonyms
 with small shops is the reason for big discounts. So, if small shops
starts
Suggestion
start
 getting close, they would not give these discounts.
Therefore
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, People will suffer as they have to buy costly products. To illustrate with an example, according to a survey from
Survey
Suggestion
the Survey
.
com
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Com
 in India, 70% of big shopping complex agrees that they are giving discounts, so that people come to their malls rather than going to small shops. To conclude, There always should be
competition
Use synonyms
 in the market so common people get benefits from
this
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 and getting cheaper products. But if these small
shops get
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shops, get
 closed
this
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competition
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 will disappear and people
needs
Suggestion
need
 to buy costly things. Along with
this
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, it
also
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 will be the reason for the unemployment. Due to these reasons, I believe
this
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 is a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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