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The given illustration depicts the Grange park plan in 1920 and today. Modernised arrangement has significant changes since then.

The given illustration depicts the Grange
park
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 plan in 1920 and today. Modernised arrangement has significant changes since
then
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. The fountain has had the considerable change to remove from the
park
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 centre to the corner of the
park
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 in the shape of realistic water feature, where it was a glasshouse before. One Rose garden has been moved to the centre
instead
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, surrounded with seats. Children’s play area and a new café replaced the old garden and pond. A new underground car
park
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 with entrance has facilitated private transport vehicles. The other dramatic development is the musicians' stage, which has been transformed to the spacious amphitheatre for concerts. While just a small group of people could be fitted inside the old stage, outdoor amphitheatre has huge capacity to organise large crowds on the rounded benches. The
park
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 tranquillity is enhanced in general,
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 the size of it has not been changed.

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