Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about health. Do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that schools are not teaching enough to teenagers regarding to health topics.I disagree with

this

statement because in

school

curriculum focus on various tips on well-being and introduced sports activities.

To begin

with, there are several tips related to health in the

school

's timetable for young one.

This

all information on adolescent fitness which makes younger one to fit and healthy by giving details about hand hygiene.

For example

, faculty conducted seminars on hand hygiene, which teach how to wash hands in following steps, it includes 8 steps to make hand clear.

As a result

, youth learn the importance of well-being and may they will tell their parents at home,

also

their friends circle.

Furthermore

school

makes healthy food in their cafeteria where institution's students eat hygienic food and they

also

make them fit.

Moreover

, other positive things in the form of introducing sports sessions for the

school

's pupil.

In addition

to other words, sports make students physically fit and powerful, it increases stamina and physical as well as mental strength, which enhances the thinking process

also

.As a consequence, young person gets a high fitness level and improve the intellectual level. To add to

this

, students

also

learn which sports game require what kind of diet, so there are given numerous diet plans according to play by

school

's organizations. In conclusion, the department teaches a radical approach to young students in regard to physical health as implementation of sports games and timetable on special lectures on it.

This

will be more needed in future life because of the sedentary lifestyle of institute pupils.

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Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about health. Do you agree or disagree.

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