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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. Now
people
 are beginning to realize that everyday
news
 has become an essential part of our lives. Personally, I tend to think that showing both sides of the
news
 is essential.
Firstly
, it is well known that presenting bad
news
 has an influence on our mood and emotions during the whole day. What I mean here is that you are going to work and the radio presents something awful that happened in another country, of course, it has an impact on your mood.
However
,
people
 should know everything
that is
 happening. One of the main reasons behind
that is
people
 have to live in reality and perceive everything seriously.
On the other hand
, it can
also
 be argued that it be better if more good
news
 was reported.
That is
 to say, it has
also
 an impact on our attitude toward the world. Take,
for instance
,
news
 editors reporting that the price of certain products decreased. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that both types of
news
 have a significant effect on our mood.
Additionally
,
people
 should keep up to date with all the
news
 and live in reality.
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Examples
It would enhance your essay to include more specific examples to fully support your arguments. While you have offered an example about the impact of good news on people's moods, adding more varied and detailed examples could strengthen your essay further.
Structure
Consider expanding your introduction to more clearly outline the main points that will be discussed in your essay. This will provide your readers with a clearer roadmap of your argument right from the beginning.
Conclusion
In your conclusion, try to succinctly summarize the main points of your essay rather than only restating the premise that both types of news affect our mood. A stronger conclusion might also include a reflective thought or a call to action, which could make your essay more memorable.
Argument Balance
You've clearly stated your personal stance and presented arguments for both sides, which contributes positively to a balanced discussion.
Organization
Your essay's structure, including the division into paragraphs and the clear expression of ideas, enhances its readability and coherence.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Engagement
  • Relevance
  • Urgency
  • Natural disasters
  • Political upheavals
  • Public health concerns
  • Advertising revenue
  • Sponsorship deals
  • Market competition
  • Editorial policies
  • Censorship
  • Newsworthy
  • Desensitization
  • Bad news fatigue
  • Negativity bias
  • Balanced view
  • Social media
  • Viral content
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