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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development?

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This
 modern era, is mostly based on technologies and machines, due to which the world has become a global village.
this
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This
 essay will articulate about how the globalisation is a completely positive development, with the reasons and its pertinent and examples. To commence with, many organisations are expanding and exploring their business, outside the geographical boundaries of a particular country.
this
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This
 can assist to increase in employment. To cite and example, the famous supermarket ' seven eleven', if expanded in underdeveloped countries, the labour productivity will start ascending.
Moreover
, globalisation
also
 has many pros like
selling
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the selling
 of
product increases
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a product increases
the product increases
, create Goodwill, rivalry in
market
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the market
, increases average growth rate, increases national income and
also
 there will be good relations among the countries and so on.
Conversely
, it has some cons like increase in expense, consumes a lot of time, it will be benefited to reach people
instead
 of poor people,
more usage
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more use
 of natural resources and so on. It can be overlooked because of having more powerful reasons as compared to few negative ones.
in
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In
 conclusion, by putting down my pen, globalisation is the strategy of earning profits and clearing more consumers.
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