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is it good for children to start using computers from early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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In
this
 technical era the most of children spend their time on the internet using computers in early childhood, which have both merits
such
 as increasing creativity level and learning educational programs and demerits which include health problem and behavioural problems in children's life.
To begin
 with, there are various positive effects of using computers in the early age of children.
First
 and foremost is kids can improve level of creativity and a develop the highest milestone in the development of the brain and their growth in pre-school students.
Secondly
, some students have computers in primary school, which emphasizes on learning several subjects through computers.
As a result
, students easily find and learnt related to any courses on PS.
For example
, help of computers child remember new word and meaning as dictionary at available at the computer.
However
, there are a number of negative impacts on children as they spend a long time on the PC playing games and listening to music.There are chances to damaging eye sight as students sitting in front of the computer for hours.
Moreover
, a child becoming introverted and homesick, these all lead to not participate in any sports activity in school and child gain weight as sedentary lifestyle.
In other words
, so many health issues create because of the modern era of science and technology. In conclusion, having the technology and the computers kids will be becoming lazy and do not importance of outdoor sports activity, but the computer is
also
 beneficial in many aspects as the educational purposes and learning creative ideas.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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