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Band 7.5

Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear Emily, I’m so happy to hear about your college project on New
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 celebrations. I’d love to tell you how we celebrate it here in Sri Lanka, where it’s one of the most important festivals of the
year
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. New
Year
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, or Avurudu as we call it, is very important to people in my country because it marks the beginning of a new harvest season and brings families together. It’s a time when everyone forgets their worries and starts fresh with happiness and hope. We celebrate it in April
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 the traditional solar calendar. Before the New
Year
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, people clean and decorate their homes, buy new clothes, and prepare traditional sweets
such
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 as kiribath (milk rice) and kokis. When the auspicious time arrives, families light the hearth, share meals, visit relatives, and exchange gifts. Many enjoy traditional games, drumming, and other joyful activities in the village. What I love most about our New
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 is the strong sense of unity and peace it brings. Everyone, regardless of background, comes together to celebrate with kindness, laughter, and love. I hope
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 helps with your project! Warm wishes, Nishan

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coherence
Try to put one big idea in each paragraph. The first paragraph feels like two ideas: why New Year is important and the harvest link. Split them.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one part to the next.
structure
Make the opening clear to say why you write. End with a short wrap up.
content
Clear idea of why New Year is important in your country.
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Good detail about how the New Year is kept and shared with people.
tone
Friendly tone that fits a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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