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: The best way to solve world’s environmental problem is increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion?

#world’s #cost #fuel
It is believed that
traffic
 and
pollution
 issues would be best tackled by inflating the
price
 of petroleum. In my opinion,
this
 idea is completely flawed and there are several reasonable alternatives. Clearly the
price
 of
fuel
 has little to do with pressing problems of
traffic
 and
pollution
. The inevitable demand for time
efficience
the ratio of the output to the input of any system
efficiency
 and safe commuting in the modern world makes the change
of
Suggestion
in
fuel
 prices become rather insignificant, which proves the ineffectiveness of the suggested policy.
In other words
, even if the
price
 were increased, people would still travel by their preferred form of transport on a daily basis and the problems of
traffic
 and
pollution
 would remain.
Additionally
,
this
 solution could easily trigger social disagreement and resentment.
This
, coupled with the reluctance of using expensive
fuel
 to travel every day, could be
counter-productive
tending to hinder the achievement of a goal
counterproductive
 and
this
 proposed idea would become irrelevant.
On the other hand
, alternatives to increasing the
price
 of petrol show greater effectiveness.
Firstly
, governments could implement certain regulations restricting the use of private vehicles
such
 as cars and turn people to using public transportation.
This
 would relieve many roads from heavy
traffic
 congestion by reducing the number of vehicles on the road, which in turn alleviates the problem of
pollution
 caused by exhaust emissions.
Secondly
, in many cities around the world, cycling has proved to be an effective, environmentally friendly form of alternative transport and should be encouraged more in other major cities. Certain infrastructure,
such
 as separate zones for cyclists, should be created to help avoid the overload of
traffic
 during rush hour when the number of vehicles can exceed the road’s capacity. In conclusion, I believe that heightening the
price
 of
fuel
 used for travelling to address
traffic
 and
pollution
 problems is somewhat absurd; and that there
is
Suggestion
are
 a number of other more suitable and effective solutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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