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Some people believe that online reading materials should only be used to learn to read whereas others believe that only printed materials should be used. Discuss both these views and give your opinions.

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It is considered by few people that children should go through different study materials in internet to learn something whil
eas oth
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whilst
er people think that there is no other way than printed materials to learn something for children. In my opinion, I believe that printed reading materials has
mor
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have
e advantages and positive impacts upon children while learning different objectives.
First
 of all, traditional methods of learning like prin
ted boo
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to print
ks, drawing in b
oa
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on
rds, writing in pape
rs etc are
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papers, etc.
papers etc.
widely accepted in
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is widely accepted
whol
e world eve
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the whole world
n if there are various electronic devices for educational purposes nowadays.
In addition
, children can easily capture and memorize any topic when they go through books and write in their notebooks.
Moreover
, it is great to learn and study something while holding the book and turning the pages.
Also
, they can easily get the books or other printed study materials at any time at home or school and it is cost effective.
On the other hand
, due to technological advancement at the present time, various electronic gadgets like mobile, laptop etc
are
continuing in the same way
etc.
 easily accessible to all people.
Therefore
, children can easily access to these devices and can go through many websites for learning or clearing concept.
However
, all websites are not trustworthy and some of them
them wro
objective case of they
them
ng information and explanation.
Besides
this
, they
hav
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They
e can eye problems due to constant watching at s
cr
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on
een and
also
 have problems in their neck and spine because of sitting position while using devi
ces. T
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the devices
o conclude, parents and school authority should be aware of the negative effects of online devices for learning and they should encourage children to learn from their books and other printed resources.
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