Some people say that music is a good way of brining people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a view in several people that
music
is one of the important parts to remove differences of cultures and ages, and to bring them together. I completely agree with
this
thought.
This
essay will cover few positive aspects which will explain the same in detail.
To begin
with, it
can not
can not
cannot
be denied that the
music
is an
extra ordinary
beyond what is ordinary or usual; highly unusual or exceptional or remarkable
extraordinary
thing which can be enjoyed without being worried about the lyrics of a
song
.
In other words
, people used follow the different culture pattens
such
as dance steps and cloth sense while enjoying the
song
. Even if it is from the different social groups and do not understand what is being said in the
song
.
For example
, a huge number of non-
gujarati
a member of the people of Gujarat
Gujarati
people used to dance
on
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to
Gujarati language songs known as Garbas and used to wear
gujarati
a member of the people of Gujarat
Gujarati
clothes in Navratri festival.
Eventhough
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Even though
they do not understand the language properly, they use to do proper step on the basis of
music
.
Thus
,
music
brings different cultured
group
together on the same dance floor. Another point is that
music
removes the gap between
different
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different age groups
age
group
.
Furthermore
, though many people from
yonger
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the youngest
younger
age
group
do not like
lyrics
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the lyrics
from the old
song
, they used to praise the
music
from it.
Moreover
, at the opposite
situationt
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
situation t
,
most of elderly people
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most elderly people
do not like the lyrics from new
generation
Accept comma addition
generation, however
however
they like the beats of
music
instead
.
Hence
, the
music
industry has bought a new level of
music
which is a remix
song
, a combination of old and new
music
song
.
This
encourage
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encourages
is encouraging
has encouraged
different
age
group
people to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
the same
song
together with the same interest. In conclusion,
music
is a key solution to remove different
boundries
the line or plane indicating the limit or extent of something
boundaries
of
age
groups and cultures.
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