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Nowadays children watch too much TV. Why is this happening, and what can be done to prevent it?

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Many modern children spend a great deal of
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 reclining in front of a
television
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 or computer screen.
This
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 essay shall discuss some of the main reasons why children spend more
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 watching
television
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 than they did in the past and suggest ways to restrain it. Children tend to spend more
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 watching
television
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 as a leisure
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 of doing active or c
reative,
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 as many children in modern life are lack of looking after from their parents as well as their teacher and most of the adults are usually occupied with their jobs, and
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 do not spend much
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 playing with their children. Another reason is the trend of using technology has gained popularity in recent years
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 way might easily become sedentary and get obese as they are not participating in indoor and outdoor activities
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 as drawing
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playing sports and playing a game with other children. There are two actions that parents could be taken to solve
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 problem.
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irstly parents
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Firstly, parents
should limit the
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 of using
television
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 or computers and every day they can determine a specific
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 for them,
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, they can reduce the number of hours of watching
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. The
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 is that parents should encourage their child to do other activities
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 as read books, play sports or drawing, which will ensure a healthy and dynamic environment for children. In conclusion, these days children tend to spend more
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 watching
television
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 of joining sports c
lubs but
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clubs, but
various measures can be taken to combat
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 problem.

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