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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this element.

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Some people believe the government's
money
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 should be spent on railways, others on the roads. In
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 essay I will explain the reasons why I agree that
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 should be spent on railways Investing in railways is essential as trains are more convenient than other means of transport. Take,
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,
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 only train is needed to carry thousands of passengers to work, meanwhile, private cars are used by
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 or two people at a time, increasing the traffic noticeably. Another advantage of trains is the short time it takes to arrive downtown.
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, in Buenos Aires it would take maybe
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 hour driving in heavy traffic to get from the city to neighbouring areas
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 as Vicente Lopez, whereas by train it would only take approximately 15 to 20 minutes.
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, those who think
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 should be spent on roads claim that cars can reach places that trains do not. The province of Misiones, in Argentina, is
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 clear example of
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, where there are no railway tracks. In spite of
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, supporters of trains argue that these are environmentally friendlier than cars owing to the small amount fumes they emit. To illustrate, the contamination emitted by
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 car in a 30
kilometres
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 trip equals to 400 kilometres of train ride. In conclusion, whereas roads should be built and looked after by the government to reach far away cities, in my opinion,
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 should be spent mainly on building railways and trains as these are faster, more convenient and less polluting than cars.
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, politicians should always bear in mind ecological and practical aspects of transport to decide where to spend its funds.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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