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Visa regulations should be relaxed for overseas students. Do you agree or disagree?

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The popularity of studying abroad is growing nowadays, and the required paperwork,
such
 as
visa
 applying is being commonly discussed to be simplified or even
canceled
(of events) no longer planned or scheduled
cancelled
. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and consider that the procedure of obtaining a
visa
 should not be facilitated.
First
 of all, the main reason
visa
 regulations should remain as they are or even become stricter is the safety issue.
Although
 the main students’ purpose of studying abroad is to get an
education
, sometimes they can get into trouble.
For instance
, some students that don't have enough money to pay tuition or something else may start to work illegally. I suppose
visa
 regulations should help the government to prevent
such
 situations due to frequent
visa
 requirements to have a certain amount of money
on
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in
 the
students’
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student’s
 bank account to cover the
education
 fees and activities for leisure time.
Secondly
, there is an economic aspect. It is inevitable that relaxed
visa
 legislation in a certain country would ensure an inflow of students want to get an
education
 there while the supply of universities remains at the same quantity. It would cause difficulties or even the impossibility of entering the university for citizens of
this
 country.
For example
, some university in a small town has a limited quantity of available places and, if the
visa
 issues are simplified by
government’s policy
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the government’s policy
, many overseas students would apply for studying and there would be no places for the locals.
Visa
 regulations can help in balancing the scales of students’ demand and universities’ supply of
education
. To conclude, I strongly believe that
visa
 requirements provide safety for both sides, the country, and the students themselves, so they shouldn’t be facilitated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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