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17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar. Some people believe that
teamwork
 will boost individual cognitive capacity. I totally agree with them and the essay will discuss my opinion.
To begin
 with, it is a truth that
team
work
 will encourage the growth of cognitive intelligence and wisdom as long as all members are willing to cooperate and learn together. There is a Chinese saying, " In a group of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them."  Participants will receive feedbacks from the peels during
team
work
. Useful and precise feedbacks will boost receiver's intelligent development and broad their knowledge horizontally. 
In addition
,
teamwork
 will provide chances for participants to challenge their cognitive capacities. During the
team
w
ork time,
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work, time
 participants are required to stay focused and contribute to their task.
Therefore
,
teamwork
 will improve cognitive skills,
such
 as attention, memory, and information organization. Meanwhile, the latter will boosts participants' ability to focus, learn, and solve problems. Some studies show that being 
team
 members will help them to understand topics or tasks more thoroughly and easily, especially for certain sophistical topics or tasks.  In conclusion,
team
 activity will contribute to the growth of
team
 member's cognitive skills and intelligence as well.
Moreover
,
team
work
 will assist members to practice their mental abilities.
Therefore
, I believe that
teamwork
 will benefit people and help them become smarter.
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