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Government should spend more money on education or sports and recreation .Do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #education #sports #recreation
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It is suggested by some that the regime needs to incur
money
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 on
education
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, while others believe that sports and recreational field had better be flourished. As per my opinion, facilities related to games and rejuvenation should be provided by government
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 of outlying on
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. There are various reasons why am I in favour of promoting sports.
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 and foremost, youngsters can opt their favourite career path. If young ones do not have interest in studies and they want to be good
sportspersons
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sports persons
, organizing sports events and providing facilities related to their respective sports will help them to show their calibre in the field they want. To illustrate more, who is going to study physics and chemistry when they really have the desire to be cricketer in their
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 life? So, sports are the best domain in which government must spend
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.
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, others opine that
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 should be expended on
education
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 because they think that when authorities offer a better
education
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 system to children, they can become good doctors, engineers of the future and
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 helps country to boost their economy.As those doctors and engineers will
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 serve their own nation, but they do not know if juveniles do study for the whole day, they will end up getting depressed.
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 of becoming engineers and doctors they will become mentally ill.
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, government is supposed to use its
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 to make recreational places, where young ones can go and have fun. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that higher authorities should think seriously before utilizing their
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 on
education
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 because for the holistic growth of budding minds, sports and enjoyment are rudimentary.
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