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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The way people buy their groceries have changed dramatically. Due to the fast pace growth of multinational
grocery
 stores, many small time merchants have gone out of business. Some believe that
this
 has a detrimental effect on the local community. I completely disagree with
this
 argument, as I believe stronger presence of large organisations will aid to boost the local economy and will provide great benefits. Multinational
grocery
 stores have revolutionized the consumer's shopping experience.
In other words
, the way we used to
shop
 was by going to a local retail
grocery
 store and ask the owner of the
shop
 or give them a list of items that are required. They,
then
 would select the items which are available in the store and provide the items regardless of the consumer brand specific choice is. Sometimes these items are sold at the maximum retail price.Whereas, in large
grocery
 stores the consumers have a greater power and a choice when purchasing an item.
For example
, when I
shop
, I would always be on the lookout for discounted products and
also
, compare between many products before my purchase.
Therefore
, from a consumer standpoint multinational companies provide a better shopping experience than the traditional methods. Despite many benefits, some believe with the strong presence of large
grocery
 stores in our local community would eventually make the small-time
shop
 owners go out of business and will have detrimental effects to the local economy. While I would agree that many small businesses will be shut rapidly I would disagree with the latter. Multinational
grocery
 stores are usually large in size and require the manpower to continue with the day-to-day tasks.
This
 obviously creates jobs for the local youths within the community. Not only
this
, these organizations
also
 consider purchasing products from local farmers to keep-up with their corporate social responsibility (CSR) projects which will
also
 boost the local farmers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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