Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The way people buy their groceries have changed dramatically. Due to the fast pace growth of multinational

grocery

stores, many small time merchants have gone out of business. Some believe that

this

has a detrimental effect on the local community. I completely disagree with

this

argument, as I believe stronger presence of large organisations will aid to boost the local economy and will provide great benefits. Multinational

grocery

stores have revolutionized the consumer's shopping experience.

In other words

, the way we used to

shop

was by going to a local retail

grocery

store and ask the owner of the

shop

or give them a list of items that are required. They,

then

would select the items which are available in the store and provide the items regardless of the consumer brand specific choice is. Sometimes these items are sold at the maximum retail price.Whereas, in large

grocery

stores the consumers have a greater power and a choice when purchasing an item.

For example

, when I

shop

, I would always be on the lookout for discounted products and

also

, compare between many products before my purchase.

Therefore

, from a consumer standpoint multinational companies provide a better shopping experience than the traditional methods. Despite many benefits, some believe with the strong presence of large

grocery

stores in our local community would eventually make the small-time

shop

owners go out of business and will have detrimental effects to the local economy. While I would agree that many small businesses will be shut rapidly I would disagree with the latter. Multinational

grocery

stores are usually large in size and require the manpower to continue with the day-to-day tasks.

This

obviously creates jobs for the local youths within the community. Not only

this

, these organizations

also

consider purchasing products from local farmers to keep-up with their corporate social responsibility (CSR) projects which will

also

boost the local farmers.

Wed Jan 29 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

313 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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