Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras) In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweighs its disadvantages?

It is often thought by some that technologies, which are now made to watch what people say or do through their phones that are used to track them or
security
cameras, are better to be monitoring individuals without their knowledge, while others think it is better for them to be aware of
this
monitoring. I believe it is best for them to be unaware because of safety reasons and having a normal life. Despite the drawbacks below, I think the advantages of individuals to be unaware that they are monitored are more important.
Firstly
, we will have more
security
and safety in our lives and society when they are unaware,
that is
because in that way, we will have more chance to detect any possible crimes and prevent it from happening. A murderer,
for instance
, who is waiting outside someone's house with his knife and s
uspecious
openly distrustful and unwilling to confide
suspicious
clothing will be detected by the
security
cameras that are on the street.
Secondly
, it is o
f
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about
for
the good of people to be not aware because
this
is the only way they can act normal in their lives and live it freely without any worries that they are w
atched
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watching
all the times. Without
this
feeling of freedom, it will very disturbing for them to know they are being watched and tracked twenty four hours a day. Admittedly, there could be some disadvantages to track others without their knowledge. One problem is that there will be no privacy for them, the reason behind
that is
everything is recorded. Take China,
for example
, they record every single movement and talk of any individual who lives in a city. Which means, that would leave him or her with no big room for a private life.
Furthermore
, another possible issue is that could cost a government body a load of unnecessary data wasting, which are used to record everything.
Moreover
, a lot of money will be needed for
this
development, which is for the devices that register all the information and all the workers who are working on
this
tracking. In conclusion, I believe
security
reasons and living a life normally and freely far o
utwighs
be heavier than
outweighs
outweigh
any possible negative aspects.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Surveillance
  • 2. Monitoring
  • 3. Cell phone tracking
  • 4. Security cameras
  • 5. Public safety
  • 6. Law enforcement
  • 7. Privacy concerns
  • 8. Personal freedom
  • 9. Autonomous
  • 10. Breach of trust
  • 11. Misuse of information
  • 12. Institutional integrity
  • 13. Psychological impact
  • 14. Mental well-being
  • 15. Societal trust
  • 16. Paranoia
  • 17. Transparency
  • 18. Stringent regulations
  • 19. Criminal deterrence
  • 20. Apprehension of criminals
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