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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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According to
late
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the latest
 surveys, lots of people want to run own business. Alongside myriad reasons for
this
 phenomenon,
however
, several drawbacks are behind self-employees. Various
motivation
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motivations
 lead people to choose to start own business.
First
 of all, many young people face difficulty acquiring an appropriate job. When you apply
to
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for
 a job in a
company
 they would like to pick someone up whom has the greatest quality among all
applicant
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applicants
 so that there are many individuals who are rejected and they have no choice.
Secondly
, the governments grant a lot of privileges and
franchisements
 to entrepreneurs to launch small companies and grow them in the future to make job and money to help their society
instead
 of being a just simple employee. Apparently, being someone who has own
company
 is exciting,
however
, some serious difficult consequences are for challenging
this
 matter.
First
 of all, as you work for a big
company
, you might be there for 10 up 12 hours per day, while, if you launch your firm, you might be there and work on it all day.
Secondly
, when you are an employee, it means you have insurance and a stable income at the end of the month.
By contrast
, while you run a corporation, not only you do not expect constant
revenue but
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revenue, but
also
, you must provide
this
 profit for your employees. In conclusion, choice work as
member
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a member
 of a
company
 or freelance is a hot trending. There are many young people for a bunch of different problems desire to launch their ships to the ocean
although
 there are tons of difficult situations.
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