Some people believe in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some ways. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree to some extent to the above mentioned statement, which I will be explaining below.

Firstly

, I will discuss about how

hobby

Suggestion

the hobby

is important in our lives. As, in today's world, the level of stress is increased, so human beings look for ways that can relax them mentally and physically.

For example

, the stress of health, financial worries etc. We definitely require

some thing

an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.

something

to survive by relaxing ourselves. Hobbies for an individual help us regain our lost confidence after a failure. According to some

peoples'

Suggestion

people's

belief about hobbies to be difficult in order it to be enjoyable, I will

some how

in some unspecified way or manner; or by some unspecified means

somehow

agree to

this

. Because, as we like doing difficult tasks as our hobbies, we tend to take out time for it. And, as we put more efforts to accomplish and

fullfil

put in effect

fulfil

fulfilled

it, we get the winner feelings.

Accept comma addition

If, for

for example

, something

simpler

Suggestion

simple

is to be done

Accept space

we somehow ignores

thinkinng

the process of using your mind to consider something carefully

thinking

it as a very basic and

simpler

Suggestion

simple

task. So somehow

its

it is

it's

true that hobby is supposed to be difficult to be enjoyable.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

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176 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some ways. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and do not want to visit a doctor. Why is this? Is it a positive change or negative?