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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Protecting the wildlife, especially wild animals by utilising the astronomical proportion of funds is considered to be squandered of resources in the present times. I firmly disagree with
this
 viewpoint because these living creatures play an immense role in the ecosystem and scientific research. It is easy to comprehend why I am in disagreement with
this
 assertion. The preponderant factor is that faunas are regarded as one of the valuable assets in the smooth functioning of the ecosystem. If these are not safeguarded, the food chain will get disturbed; resultantly, the ecological imbalance will impose several threats on the human beings.
For example
, when there is no cat,
then
 the population of species, which follow them in the food chain
such
 as rats will get exponentially exploded, which in turn jeopardise the individuals’ health as these can cause fatal diseases like rabies and are
also
 harmful to the agricultural production. The secondary reason is that these creatures are used for doing experimentation in order to invent some medication to cure deadly ailments
such
 as cancer, but without these species its not possible to advance the medical field.
Thus
, I acknowledge that living species, other than humans, should be shielded as these are a boon for ecological system and medical scrutiny. Despite these advantages of saving wildlife, there are some people who believe that it is just wastage of funds.
This
 is simply because they believe that there are copious of other pressing issues like poverty, universal education, health care facilities, and employment, which need an immediate allotment of public budgets. Why funds should be allotted on conserving animals when people are deprived of basic amenities?
Therefore
, these masses find the investment of resources as an injudicious decision. Conclusively,
although
 there are multifarious other concerns in the world, which need to be resolved on priority basis, I firmly believe that protection of wild animals is not a waste of resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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