Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally thought that media like

television

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can increase the spread of

violence

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shows show often violent activities, making some people believe that these actions will be imitated, perhaps by some young people. In

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essay, I will discuss

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belief.

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, I believe that today's media have some role in the education of young generations. They spend a lot of their time watching movies or

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series and, because of their young age, they are easily influenced by what they see on

television

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. In fact, I think that it is very important to show them good examples of behaviour, giving much less space to

violence

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and other dangerous activities.

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, at the same time,

television

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is not the main educator in a society. Families and schools are much more important and influential during the growth of a boy or a girl.

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, regarding adults, their nature is not defined by what they see on

television

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. They can still do something bad and violent, even if they haven't seen recently something violent on

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. Contrariwise to the general belief, I think that these blamed movies or

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series, can allow people to vent their anger and stress, so as to reduce

violence

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in social life.

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, I believe

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surely important to reduce shows of

violence

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for younger generations, but at the same time, for those who have already passed their youth,

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fictional

violence

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can serve as a relief valve and help reduce

violence

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in our community.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

media influence
desensitization
mimic
impressionable
copycat phenomenon
aggression
correlational
causal link
violent crime rates
educational role
glorification
cultural norms
social factors
community norms
regulatory measures
broadcasting restrictions
content rating systems

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Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdor activities like hiking and climbing in nstural environment. Whu is this case? How theycsn be encouraged to go out?

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