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It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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An individual might have lots of
friendship
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 bonds along his journey of life. Number of one’s friends
depends
Suggestion
depend
 on how extroverted he is. The question is: are they all available in need?
This
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 essay agrees that one true
friendship
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 bond’s worth is more than having so many relationships which cannot be counted on.
This
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 essay will discuss
this
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 matter from both materialistic and spiritual points of view.
Firstly
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,
relaying
have confidence or faith in
relying
 on your friend’s money seems to be possible when the
friendship
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 bond is powerful. Lack of sufficient money in some period of life or after an incident might happen to anyone.
For example
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, I had an accident while driving two years ago and I did not have enough cash to cover all repairing expenses. Asking
from
Suggestion
for
 my best friend resulted instantly transferring the amount I needed without hesitation from him. Not all friends do so.
Secondly
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, not only a true friend will be there when you need a shoulder to cry, but
also
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 he will try his best to make you feel
good
Suggestion
better
; whether by showing empathy or making some distractions.
Small group
Suggestion
A small group
 of people spend their valuable time to cheer us up and a special spiritual bond of
friendship
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 is needed.
For instance
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, when I was getting
divorce
Suggestion
divorced
 about seven years ago, only one of my friends was beside me to ease my pain. He forced me
going
Suggestion
to go
 to
psychologist
Suggestion
a psychologist
psychologists
 and doing exercises. He was the only soul that brought me back to life while the others were watching from the distance. To conclude,
although
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 we have so many friends around us, few people are true friends and they are the most valuable treasure we have.

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