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In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In today’s world, we use more and more online platforms like Amazon for our purchases. The main cause of
this
 is that we go to the physical
store
 way less than before. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the positive and negative aspects of
this
 new habit. Regarding buying from an online
store
, I believe that there are some indubitable benefits for the consumer.
Firstly
, the prices online are usually smaller than that of the
store
, so as to save money that we can use for other pleasures.
Furthermore
, an online
store
 is always with us.
This
 allows us to save not only money, but
also
 our precious time, that we can spend for examples doing some hobby. At the same time, I believe that there some serious disadvantages of shopping online. Many local stores are closing because they cannot compete with the prices of the big companies that sell their products online. Because of
this
, many people are losing their jobs and their activities. Despite of
this
, there are still not many rules and laws about these companies. In fact, one of the reasons why they can sell their products at these very competitive prices is that they are much less taxed than the small businessman.
Finally
, I believe that these big online stores do not represent something totally bad, but
also
 that it is absolutely necessary a strong regulation to protect our local business owners. In
this
 way, we can keep the free market and avoid a monopoly, which is always bad for the consumer.
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