In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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the young
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younger
the younger
generation
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plenty of changes in every aspect of Suggestion
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life
. Some are inventive and Use synonyms
meaningful but
some are not really accepted by their Accept comma addition
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predecessor especially
about their eating instincts and lifestyles. In my opinion, I prefer to not decide if these changes really do harm to their Suggestion
predecessor, especially
health
and stay neutral because I see both of Use synonyms
advantages
and drawbacks of Suggestion
the advantages
this
issue.
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young especially
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young, especially
teenagers are
consuming too much fast foods that contain Accept comma addition
teenagers, are
vast amount
of sugar, additives, chemical Suggestion
vast amounts
a vast amount
colors
but low nutrients unit of heat defined as the quantity of heat required to raise the temperature of 1 gram of water by 1 degree centigrade at atmospheric pressure
calories
instead
of vegetables and proteins which is conventionally prepared. Linking Words
This
has led to the rising number of people having obesity and diabetes. And I won't deny that it is clear there are a deterioration in Linking Words
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health
of nowadays Suggestion
the health
generation
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Also
, some kids are likely to stay indoors more than their former Linking Words
generation
and stick to video games and computers. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, staying up late at night and waking up late Linking Words
are
the common habits of today's teenagers because of their school tasks, deadlines or maybe just a chat with their friends.
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However
, the young today are not always careless about their Linking Words
health
and their Use synonyms
life
. Trends Use synonyms
such
as eating organic products, becoming vegetarian are set up by many young persons to raise the awareness of healthy body and acquiring a longevity in their Linking Words
life
. Clubs of sport are established more and more by youngsters to earning a good shape and good Use synonyms
health
state. What is more, they become activists who give helps not only for people at their Use synonyms
age but
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age, but
also
the elders who want to become healthy to approach to many Linking Words
health
instructions and helpful information about medic and ways to protect Use synonyms
health
. And despite having a busy Use synonyms
life
, some people are trying to find their own way to playing sports and eating rationally.
In conclusion, I believe that though the changes that the modern Use synonyms
generation
has made may be not really suitable for the previous Use synonyms
generation
, they are just a justification to the society. So they must have weak spots and strengths that we need to considerate properlyUse synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite