In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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We are observing
the young
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younger
the younger
generation
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who
have made
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has made
plenty of changes in every aspect of
life
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. Some are inventive and
meaningful but
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meaningful, but
some are not really accepted by their
predecessor especially
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predecessor, especially
about their eating instincts and lifestyles. In my opinion, I prefer to not decide if these changes really do harm to their
health
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and stay neutral because I see both of
advantages
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the advantages
and drawbacks of
this
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issue. On the one hand, in many developed countries, the
young especially
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young, especially
teenagers are
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teenagers, are
consuming too much fast foods that contain
vast amount
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vast amounts
a vast amount
of sugar, additives, chemical
colors
unit of heat defined as the quantity of heat required to raise the temperature of 1 gram of water by 1 degree centigrade at atmospheric pressure
calories
but low nutrients
instead
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of vegetables and proteins which is conventionally prepared.
This
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has led to the rising number of people having obesity and diabetes. And I won't deny that it is clear there are a deterioration in
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health
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the health
of nowadays
generation
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.
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, some kids are likely to stay indoors more than their former
generation
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and stick to video games and computers.
Furthermore
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, staying up late at night and waking up late
are
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is
the common habits of today's teenagers because of their school tasks, deadlines or maybe just a chat with their friends.
However
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, the young today are not always careless about their
health
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and their
life
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. Trends
such
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as eating organic products, becoming vegetarian are set up by many young persons to raise the awareness of healthy body and acquiring a longevity in their
life
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. Clubs of sport are established more and more by youngsters to earning a good shape and good
health
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state. What is more, they become activists who give helps not only for people at their
age but
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age, but
also
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the elders who want to become healthy to approach to many
health
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instructions and helpful information about medic and ways to protect
health
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. And despite having a busy
life
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, some people are trying to find their own way to playing sports and eating rationally. In conclusion, I believe that though the changes that the modern
generation
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has made may be not really suitable for the previous
generation
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, they are just a justification to the society. So they must have weak spots and strengths that we need to considerate properly
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