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Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Recent technical trends ruling the people to get used by technologies
such
 as mobile, laptop, internet communication, and social application. It has tremendous pros in the real world, even though some people believe, it eradicates the culture and tradition of one nation. In my opinion, I completely agree, modern
technology
 devotes abundant features to the people for their evolution of life style
however
, it has some negative impacts as well. To start with the latest
technology
 influence, according to the
survey which
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survey, which
 is conducted by the Network Administration Department, now 93.6% of people using a mobile phone with an internet connection. As a consequence, most of them are introvert. Because
technology
 simplifies the human physical effort. To illustrate, Google has invented and developed the most phenomenon
feature
Suggestion
features
 called voice recognition. Through that, we could do order food online, book transport and
, most significantly it
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, most significantly, it
 manages the timeline of human manual work.
On the contrary
, most of the people spending their precious time on playing games, chatting and surfing on the internet. As a consequence, several people failed to do their chores effectively.
In addition
 to that, nowadays school students are overwhelming in these kinds of activities.
Therefore
, they are not able to do the exam well. To examine what I mean, before 10 years, children are used to playing games on the local ground with their friends in the area where they are living. But today the situation is like, everyone spending their leisure time only on electronic devices. To put it in a nutshell, it is apparent that, recent
technology
 would always give people to get smarter and
also
 it changes the way how we live in before. In my perspective, the people who tend to use the
technology
 in a better way would get great prospects.

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