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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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The demand of foods has risen due to a growing population.
Therefore
, Some GM supporters believe that governments ought to increase the production of GM
food
. The essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 suggestion and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of GM foods are to provide cheap price and to add extra essential nutritions.
Firstly
, the costs of productions are much lower than traditional farming so people are able to afford some basic commodities,
such
 as rice and bread. Because of
this
 biotech advance, it is possible to alleviate the problem of hunger worldwide.
Secondly
,
food
 can be modified in order to add extra essential nutritions,
such
 as protein and fibre, which
also
 be given more flavour and a better texture.
As a result
, not only do GM foods prevent the problem of starvation, but
also
 provide much healthier ingredients.
However
, GM foods
also
 have its drawbacks like a treat of the environment and an influence on human health. The numbers of GM
food
 factories may produce greenhouse gases, which pollutes the air and eventually contributes to global warming.
Also
, no one knows exactly what the effect of GM
food
 will be in the long term. If people eat too many genetically modified foods in their daily lives, it will be likely to eventually affect human's organisms adversely. As a consequence, humans cannot completely reply on GM
food
 to tackle an overpopulation issue as it has some negative impacts. In conclusion,
although
 GM foods can reduce people's costs of living and help them to absorb sufficient nutritions, people should take into account the environment and prevent overeating GM foods.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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