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A lot of money is spent on renovating old buildings.We should knock them down and build modern ones instead.To what extent to you agree or disagree with these statements.

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Introduction
Old buildings ought to be knocked down and new buildings erected because a lot of
money
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 is spent on renovating it. I disagree with
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 view because ancient structures are kept for historical purposes and
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 as a
tourist
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 centre
Body paragraph 1
Old buildings should not be demolished and modern buildings erected in its stead because of the
money
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 spent on renovating as it has historical value. Meaning the history the building holds will not be lost to the future generation.
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, the structure that housed the Slaves in Badagry in Lagos
State
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, Nigeria, has been used on several occasions in history lessons, and
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 has helped the future generation to note that at one time blacks were slaves.
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, ancient structures ought not to be demolished as they have history to teach.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, the government of that
state
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 can utilize the building as a
tourist
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 attraction centre, where
money
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 can be made in the
state
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. Tourists from other countries visiting the
state
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 is a sure way of making
money
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 for the
state
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.
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, the ancient structure that Lord Luggard lived in Calabar, Cross River
State
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, Nigeria is a place for tourism now and a lot of
money
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 has been made as individuals and their family's visits the site. So, old structures can be a
tourist
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 attraction centre, and should not be pulled down.
Conclusion
To conclude, I disagree with the statement that old buildings ought to be demolished because a lot of
money
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 is spent on renovation because these buildings have historical value and they are
also
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 places for
tourist
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 to visit. Given
this
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 situation, the authorities should ensure that ancient houses are not pulled down.

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