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Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion.

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It is considered by many that contemporary designs for educational and work spaces should focus on making these areas more open and spacious. While there
are
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 a range of advantages to creating more open spaces, they
also
 have some drawbacks that must be noted. One of the biggest benefits of open spaces is that it creates a more natural environment. Humans are social creatures, so being able to communicate directly with each other makes people happier than being in a small cubicle. In a school situation, open spaces provide children with a place to build their social skills. In my country, students just sit in rows and learn information by heart, which just makes them bored and does not help their social development.
Moreover
, working out in the open can make it easier to share ideas and learn new things. In an open work or study
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area, it
 is easier to ask questions and get feedback on what you are doing than it is if you are stuck behind a desk in a closed off space.
In contrast
, open spaces can cause some problems. A major one is excessive noise. When a large number of people are sharing an office or classroom, the noise generated can make it difficult to concentrate. If a student is trying to read a book or an employee is trying to make a business call, they will not be able to do it effectively. Overall, more open spaces are advantageous
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 work and school because they create a positive environment.
However
, if these spaces are not controlled they can become too noisy and unsuitable for productive output.
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