The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

I do believe that traditional ways of healing routine as well as uncommon ailments may be an answer for
current generation
Suggestion
current generations
the current generation
, as it is a long term and effective solution, without many side-effects coming from drugs
deveopled
in laboratories.
Firstly
, we all are aware that a majority of the careers today are associated with Information technology and related industries, with
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of work is being performed in offices, sitting on chairs for long hours in isolation, as well as being in front of computers
predominantly
Suggestion
predominant
predominate
.
Thus
, lack of exercise and lack of continual social interactions, is forcing current generation into mundane lifestyle, with health issues ranging from sudden weight gain,
inadequete
lacking the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
inadequate
sleep, development of food allergies, as well as have an impact on emotional and social front,
such
as being isolated from community for months or years, living alone without much time for near and dear ones, anger and stress management issues, depression.
Secondly
, the main focus of the
drug
industry is to have greater outreach of their consumer products so as to attain faster as well as continual commercial success, not necessarily to offer low cost and effective medication
such
as generic medicines to the society. Much of lobbying and political influence, expiry of patents or exclusivity as well as higher cost associated with
production
Suggestion
the production
and development of the molecules, may be forcing the
drug
manufacturers do so. It is not only bringing down the quality of medicines produced today, but
also
causing other issues
such
as
drug
contamination, supply of counterfeit drugs,
drug
smuggling, addiction. It impacts the patients with development of adverse side effects,
drug
addition and
opiod
give help or assistance; be of service
aid
crisis,
intolerence
impatience with annoyances
intolerance
to medication, even causing cancers.
Thus
, the drugs today do not necessarily treat the disorders, but cause more harm than the benefits.
On the other hand
, traditional techniques of treating human body inside and outside, with use of naturopathy and yoga, or homoeopathy, may appear to be slow in treatment, but has long term benefits of complete treatment without any side effects. It goes to the deep of any health ailment and offers greater satisfaction to the patients. One
such
example is Yoga, which enhances inner and well as outer health, with focus on breathing, diet, exercise, sleep and
developes
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develops
focus, mindfulness and positive behaviour.
Thus
, traditional techniques offer
much better way
Suggestion
a much better way
of treating a disease than modern medicine, with complete eradication of the problem and uplifting the living standards, without many side-effects.
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