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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitudes are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued whether it is a pedagogical expert who contributes to achieving an educational goal by learners, or it is the motivation of
student
 which plays a key role in successful studying. In my opinion, these two factors are inseparable and
exclusively
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exclusion
exclusions
 together may pave the way to the educational progression. Admittedly, teacher-led lessons are widely regarded as an integral part of any comprehensive education or vocational courses. The main point
to
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of
this
 is that a highly qualified teacher knows how to discriminate between sources and sift through the information to ensure authenticity and deliver effective lessons. These professionals can inspire students for assimilating knowledge and guide them towards their objectives.
Moreover
, each
student
 demands an individual approach due to the different abilities and diligence and in some cases it might seem impossible for the learner to excel in studying/education without direct supervision.
Conversely
, no competent teacher or well-designed syllabus would enhance a potential for progression if the
student
 has no incentives for learning. It is the
student
 who shall
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 to gain knowledge and develop their skills but not the educational expert and guided lessons which are meant to be just a valuable
supplement
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supplemented
supplementary
supplemental
supplementing
.
In other words
, students should not rely excessively on teachers or educational institutions when making no effort to succeed. In conclusion, the educational success is grounded on both - highly qualified educators and
students
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students'
student
student's
 motivation for studying. Together they are set to remain driving forces for one’s well-rounded education and personal development.
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