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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #time
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Undoubtedly luxurious life is the dream of every individual in
modern era
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the modern era
. It is
widely held belief
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a widely held belief
 that everyone is running behind materialistic world. It has been observed that some people wish to earn more
money
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instead
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 of spending free
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time but
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time, but
 there is a strong counter argument amongst sections of people that enjoying more free
time
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 rather than earning
money
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 is better. I will discuss both the views in upcoming paragraph. To commence with, there are certain group of people who earn more penny and spend less quality
time
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 with their loved ones. Financial stability is the main focus behind their work. They can spend a comfortable life. Quality education can be imparted to the kids. They can give top-notch health facilities to their near and dear ones.
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, famous businessman, celebrities are financially capable of buying items without looking at the price tag.
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, there are certain groups of people who vehemently contend that giving their valuable
time
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 to family, home and to themselves
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 of running behind the
money
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 is more important. They are satisfied with what they have. The feelings they share with their loved ones are priceless. Giving
time
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 to themselves to make them healthy. Some people like to enhance their hobby in their free
time
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. It makes them physically as well as mentally relax. They can inculcate good moral values in their kids by spending quality
time
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 with them. To conclude, after analysing both the views, I assert that spending
time
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 and earning
money
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 are good, but to some limit. Caring about your loved once and sharing your experience in free
time
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 is the need of an hour. They need financial as well as moral support to live a happy and healthy life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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